Are you in one of the Manaiakalani schools?

We are learning to write a description.
I know I can do this when I write a brainstorm and a script to describe the 2015 Manaiakalani film festival.
Transcript:
On the 11th of November 2015, I went to Hoyts Sylvia Park in Mrs Dines’ car to represent my class Room 7 from St Patrick’s school in the Manaiakalani film festival. We watched different short movies that other schools have made like Tamaki primary, Glen Innes school, St Patrick's, Glenbrae, Panmure bridge, Stonefields.

Wow! That's a lot of schools!

Have you ever been in a Powhiri before?

On the 25th of March, St. Patrick’s school went to Pt. England reserve to welcome Malama Honua from Hawaii. They came to shore on a waka. The weather was sunny and partly cloudy.

First of all, we hopped on the bus to travel. When we got off the bus, we walked for a bit to get to the shore. The teachers settled us into our seats, they were like directors whot told us what to do.

When we looked around, we saw 11 different schools, like Pt England school , Panmure Bridge, Tamaki Primary, Tamaki college, St. Patricks, St. Pius X, Glen Innes, Stonefields , Ruapotaka and Summerville. These are all the schools in the cluster.

We saw the waka coming onto the shore. It was white and brown and it was like a submarine. The visitors came onto the shore on a little white speed boat. After that the people who represented our schools danced and sang the haka.

Then we sang some songs. The first song that we sang was He honore. This a song for karakia. Then we sang Nga waka and it was a fast song. The people who came from Hawaii travels around the world visiting other schools.

When the Powhiri ended we got to hi five the visitors and that was my best part of the day. I felt happy because we got to greet the Hawaiian people and  make them feel welcome. 

WALT use language features in my recount. Success criteria: I know I can do this when I use similes and
verbs correctly.